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[HopeLess20]

Nobody know's,How long it has been. I wish i could see your face. The days I missed, The years went by,The mounths passed. So long I could see you in my eyes.In my mind there was always a picture of you by my side.TPhe warmth of your body when you held me in your arms,there could be no better place.The beating of your heart in my ears,there could be no better sound. But now you have gone away from me and i can no longer see.You were the one who bought the light in my life. The light that lead me the right way.

Tell me if you like me poem I would really love to know!!!

[BrokenNeckBoy]

it just occured to me that this site is about love.

whoops.

my poems are off topic.

[Sigh]

First - Brokenneckboy- well I for one would say don't limit what you submit here...your stuff is great...and love is a big topic which embraces even the angst we feel (your kinda an angstigator I think). So keep going and see if someone actually objects...if it was all broken hearts it would be unbearable:D

Which brings me to my second point: Hopeless20- you have communicated your loss effectivley...but I suspect you can dig deeper...I seriously don't want to put you off at all...I just think if you look at your pain from all angles and reach for some ways of describing it no-one has ever heard before...you could communicate it in more vital way.
And also isn't having another human being the thing bringing light into your life a risky policy. Be self radiant - shine!:)