just one of my poems,tell me what you think about it

[MizzPoet]

You Said

You said "I love you"
but do you still..
You said I was your girl
Am I still that one...
You said our love will be here forever
Now how come you ain´t longer mine?

Anela aka MizzPoet

[Sigh]

Direct and simple...to the point...almost haikuish in that way...nice...but it left me wanting more....a view of the people involved...a detail...a setting for the scene? Or a knife like Alanis Morrisette 'You said you'd love me 'til the day you die / well you're still alive!"
Post more please!
:)

-Sigh